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    Check out my resume please!

    I want to be a doctor and it's my first year of college. I want to apply for a paying job or a voluntering job and I want to know your opinion on my resume. Feel free to criticize or make fun of how bad it probably is. Thank you, very appreciated!

    Dilxxx xxxx
    83 Maxxxx Drive
    xxxxxx, MI 48323
    248-xxx-xxxx – xxxxxx@gmail.com



    EMPLOYMENT OBJECTIVE
    • To utilize my skills and contribute to the work environment.


    EDUCATIONAL BACKGROUND
    • Wayne State University, Detroit, Mi. (200
    • Major: Biology (Pre-Med)
    • XXXXX High School, XXXXXX, MI. (2004-2008)

    High School Courses taken:
    • Calculus (2008)
    • AP American History (2007)
    • AP Spanish (2007)
    • Anatomy (2007)
    • AP Physics (2006)


    WORK EXPERIENCE
    • None

    SPECIAL SKILLS
    • Semi-Fluent in Spanish.
    • Can type 85 words per minute.
    • Worked at register for 2 years
    • Courses in Advanced Computer Training.


    HOBBIES AND OTHER INTERESTS
    • Key Club and Sadd (Students against Drunk Driving).
    • School sports: Football, Track, and Baseball
    • Passion to help people
    • Church volunteer

    REFERENCES
    • Available on request.

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    Re: Check out my resume please!

    To preempt the non-Americans going "zomg that's too short!":

    In the US, we have resumes, and they're ridiculously short as compared to your CVs.

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    Re: Check out my resume please!


    Dilxxx xxxx
    83 Maxxxx Drive
    xxxxxx, MI 48323
    248-xxx-xxxx – [email]xxxxxx@gmail.com[/email]



    EMPLOYMENT OBJECTIVE
    • To utilize my skills and contribute to the work environment.


    EDUCATIONAL BACKGROUND
    • Wayne State University, Detroit, Mi. (2007-)
    • Major: Biology (Pre-Med)
    • XXXXX High School, XXXXXX, MI. (2004-2007)

    High School Courses taken:
    • Calculus (2007)
    • AP American History (2007)
    • AP Spanish (2007)
    • Anatomy (2007)
    • AP Physics (2006)


    WORK EXPERIENCE
    • None

    SPECIAL SKILLS
    • Semi-Fluent in Spanish.
    • Can type 85 words per minute.
    • Worked at register for 2 years
    • Courses in Advanced Computer Training.


    HOBBIES AND OTHER INTERESTS
    • Key Club and Sadd (Students against Drunk Driving).
    • School sports: Football, Track, and Baseball
    • Passion to help people
    • Church volunteer

    REFERENCES
    • Available on request.



    My comments:


    Dilxxx xxxx
    83 Maxxxx Drive
    xxxxxx, MI 48323
    248-xxx-xxxx – xxxxxx@gmail.com



    EMPLOYMENT OBJECTIVE
    To utilize my skills and contribute to the work environment.
    Remove this. A resume will be glanced at, make the most interesting information first. Assume the person looking at it, if it is looked at, will have a stack of 500, and an hour to "read" them all.


    EDUCATIONAL BACKGROUND
    Wayne State University, Detroit, Mi. (2007-)
    • Major: Biology (Pre-Med)
    • XXXXX High School, XXXXXX, MI. (2004-2007)
    See first comment. Put your grades, and notable achievements here.


    High School Courses taken:
    • Calculus (2007)
    • AP American History (2007)
    • AP Spanish (2007)
    • Anatomy (2007)
    • AP Physics (2006)


    WORK EXPERIENCE
    None

    Cut this out. Explain in the cover letter why you don't have work experience. Don't flaunt it here.


    SPECIAL SKILLS
    • Semi-Fluent in Spanish.
    • Can type 85 words per minute.
    • Worked at register for 2 years
    • Courses in Advanced Computer Training.


    Now this is good! Put it above the high school courses. This is what will get you a job.


    HOBBIES AND OTHER INTERESTS
    • Key Club and Sadd (Students against Drunk Driving).
    • School sports: Football, Track, and Baseball
    • Passion to help people
    • Church volunteer

    Make references a separate sheet. Have the same header as your resume.
    REFERENCES
    • Available on request.
    Last edited by LaRoza; October 29th, 2008 at 06:25 AM.

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    Re: Check out my resume please!

    Quote Originally Posted by LaRoza View Post
    Dilxxx xxxx
    83 Maxxxx Drive
    xxxxxx, MI 48323
    248-xxx-xxxx – [email]xxxxxx@gmail.com[/email]



    EMPLOYMENT OBJECTIVE
    • To utilize my skills and contribute to the work environment.


    EDUCATIONAL BACKGROUND
    • Wayne State University, Detroit, Mi. (2007-)
    • Major: Biology (Pre-Med)
    • XXXXX High School, XXXXXX, MI. (2004-2007)

    High School Courses taken:
    • Calculus (2007)
    • AP American History (2007)
    • AP Spanish (2007)
    • Anatomy (2007)
    • AP Physics (2006)


    WORK EXPERIENCE
    • None

    SPECIAL SKILLS
    • Semi-Fluent in Spanish.
    • Can type 85 words per minute.
    • Worked at register for 2 years
    • Courses in Advanced Computer Training.


    HOBBIES AND OTHER INTERESTS
    • Key Club and Sadd (Students against Drunk Driving).
    • School sports: Football, Track, and Baseball
    • Passion to help people
    • Church volunteer

    REFERENCES
    • Available on request.



    My comments:


    Dilxxx xxxx
    83 Maxxxx Drive
    xxxxxx, MI 48323
    248-xxx-xxxx – xxxxxx@gmail.com



    EMPLOYMENT OBJECTIVE
    • To utilize my skills and contribute to the work environment.
    Remove this. A resume will be glanced at, make the most interesting information first. Assume the person looking at it, if it is looked at, will have a stack of 500, and an hour to "read" them all.


    EDUCATIONAL BACKGROUND
    • Wayne State University, Detroit, Mi. (2007-)
    • Major: Biology (Pre-Med)
    • XXXXX High School, XXXXXX, MI. (2004-2007)
    See first comment. Put your grades, and notable achievements here.


    High School Courses taken:
    • Calculus (2007)
    • AP American History (2007)
    • AP Spanish (2007)
    • Anatomy (2007)
    • AP Physics (2006)


    WORK EXPERIENCE
    • None

    Cut this out. Explain in the cover letter why you don't have work experience. Don't flaunt it here.


    SPECIAL SKILLS
    • Semi-Fluent in Spanish.
    • Can type 85 words per minute.
    • Worked at register for 2 years
    • Courses in Advanced Computer Training.


    Now this is good! Put it above the high school courses. This is what will get you a job.


    HOBBIES AND OTHER INTERESTS
    • Key Club and Sadd (Students against Drunk Driving).
    • School sports: Football, Track, and Baseball
    • Passion to help people
    • Church volunteer

    Make references a separate sheet. Have the same header as your resume.
    REFERENCES
    • Available on request.
    Wow thank you so much! I wasn't expecting someone to give me that much. May God Bless!

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    Re: Check out my resume please!

    Quote Originally Posted by metallicasfan118 View Post
    Wow thank you so much! I wasn't expecting someone to give me that much.
    No problem. I have read a lot of books on it. This was the best: http://www.amazon.com/Confessions-Re.../dp/0735204047

    Almost everything I said is from that book. (I have a good memory).

    May God Bless!
    Hope so.

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    Re: Check out my resume please!

    Quote Originally Posted by LaRoza View Post
    No problem. I have read a lot of books on it. This was the best: http://www.amazon.com/Confessions-Re.../dp/0735204047

    Almost everything I said is from that book. (I have a good memory).



    Hope so.
    Haha yeah. What should be the first thing I put on that page instead of what I have?

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    Re: Check out my resume please!

    It's not necessary to have an objective, but it doesn't hurt. They can just skip it.

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    Re: Check out my resume please!

    Quote Originally Posted by macogw View Post
    It's not necessary to have an objective, but it doesn't hurt. They can just skip it.
    Ok educational background seems a good way to start it then.

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    Re: Check out my resume please!

    Quote Originally Posted by metallicasfan118 View Post
    Haha yeah. What should be the first thing I put on that page instead of what I have?
    Dilxxx xxxx
    83 Maxxxx Drive
    xxxxxx, MI 48323
    248-xxx-xxxx – xxxxxx@gmail.com


    EDUCATIONAL BACKGROUND
    • Wayne State University, Detroit, Mi. (2007-)
    * GPA: Only if it was good!
    * Any awards or honours
    • Major: Biology (Pre-Med)
    • XXXXX High School, XXXXXX, MI. (2004-2007)

    SPECIAL SKILLS
    • Semi-Fluent in Spanish.
    • Can type 85 words per minute.
    • Worked at register for 2 years This could be reworded, try to emphasise customer service and interaction
    • Courses in Advanced Computer Training. This may be more specific. Recruiters are usually technical dumb.

    High School Courses taken:
    • Calculus (2007) Grades would help, if high school was recent
    • AP American History (2007)
    • AP Spanish (2007)
    • Anatomy (2007)
    • AP Physics (2006)

    HOBBIES AND OTHER INTERESTS
    • Key Club and Sadd (Students against Drunk Driving).
    • School sports: Football, Track, and Baseball
    • Passion to help people
    • Church volunteer

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    Re: Check out my resume please!

    Quote Originally Posted by macogw View Post
    It's not necessary to have an objective, but it doesn't hurt. They can just skip it.
    An objective, especially the one above, hurts. It is obvious out of a manual, and boring. An objective would be good if you have a really specific one besides "get money and experience".

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