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metallicasfan118
October 29th, 2008, 06:14 AM
I want to be a doctor and it's my first year of college. I want to apply for a paying job or a voluntering job and I want to know your opinion on my resume. Feel free to criticize or make fun of how bad it probably is. Thank you, very appreciated!

Dilxxx xxxx
83 Maxxxx Drive
xxxxxx, MI 48323
248-xxx-xxxx xxxxxx@gmail.com



EMPLOYMENT OBJECTIVE
To utilize my skills and contribute to the work environment.


EDUCATIONAL BACKGROUND
Wayne State University, Detroit, Mi. (2008-)
Major: Biology (Pre-Med)
XXXXX High School, XXXXXX, MI. (2004-2008)

High School Courses taken:
Calculus (2008)
AP American History (2007)
AP Spanish (2007)
Anatomy (2007)
AP Physics (2006)


WORK EXPERIENCE
None

SPECIAL SKILLS
Semi-Fluent in Spanish.
Can type 85 words per minute.
Worked at register for 2 years
Courses in Advanced Computer Training.


HOBBIES AND OTHER INTERESTS
Key Club and Sadd (Students against Drunk Driving).
School sports: Football, Track, and Baseball
Passion to help people
Church volunteer

REFERENCES
Available on request.

macogw
October 29th, 2008, 06:17 AM
To preempt the non-Americans going "zomg that's too short!":

In the US, we have resumes, and they're ridiculously short as compared to your CVs.

LaRoza
October 29th, 2008, 06:22 AM
Dilxxx xxxx
83 Maxxxx Drive
xxxxxx, MI 48323
248-xxx-xxxx – xxxxxx@gmail.com



EMPLOYMENT OBJECTIVE
• To utilize my skills and contribute to the work environment.


EDUCATIONAL BACKGROUND
• Wayne State University, Detroit, Mi. (2007-)
• Major: Biology (Pre-Med)
• XXXXX High School, XXXXXX, MI. (2004-2007)

High School Courses taken:
• Calculus (2007)
• AP American History (2007)
• AP Spanish (2007)
• Anatomy (2007)
• AP Physics (2006)


WORK EXPERIENCE
• None

SPECIAL SKILLS
• Semi-Fluent in Spanish.
• Can type 85 words per minute.
• Worked at register for 2 years
• Courses in Advanced Computer Training.


HOBBIES AND OTHER INTERESTS
• Key Club and Sadd (Students against Drunk Driving).
• School sports: Football, Track, and Baseball
• Passion to help people
• Church volunteer

REFERENCES
• Available on request.



My comments:


Dilxxx xxxx
83 Maxxxx Drive
xxxxxx, MI 48323
248-xxx-xxxx – xxxxxx@gmail.com



EMPLOYMENT OBJECTIVE
• To utilize my skills and contribute to the work environment.
Remove this. A resume will be glanced at, make the most interesting information first. Assume the person looking at it, if it is looked at, will have a stack of 500, and an hour to "read" them all.


EDUCATIONAL BACKGROUND
• Wayne State University, Detroit, Mi. (2007-)
• Major: Biology (Pre-Med)
• XXXXX High School, XXXXXX, MI. (2004-2007)
See first comment. Put your grades, and notable achievements here.


High School Courses taken:
• Calculus (2007)
• AP American History (2007)
• AP Spanish (2007)
• Anatomy (2007)
• AP Physics (2006)


WORK EXPERIENCE
• None

Cut this out. Explain in the cover letter why you don't have work experience. Don't flaunt it here.


SPECIAL SKILLS
• Semi-Fluent in Spanish.
• Can type 85 words per minute.
• Worked at register for 2 years
• Courses in Advanced Computer Training.

Now this is good! Put it above the high school courses. This is what will get you a job.


HOBBIES AND OTHER INTERESTS
• Key Club and Sadd (Students against Drunk Driving).
• School sports: Football, Track, and Baseball
• Passion to help people
• Church volunteer

Make references a separate sheet. Have the same header as your resume.
REFERENCES
• Available on request.

metallicasfan118
October 29th, 2008, 06:26 AM
Dilxxx xxxx
83 Maxxxx Drive
xxxxxx, MI 48323
248-xxx-xxxx xxxxxx@gmail.com



EMPLOYMENT OBJECTIVE
To utilize my skills and contribute to the work environment.


EDUCATIONAL BACKGROUND
Wayne State University, Detroit, Mi. (2007-)
Major: Biology (Pre-Med)
XXXXX High School, XXXXXX, MI. (2004-2007)

High School Courses taken:
Calculus (2007)
AP American History (2007)
AP Spanish (2007)
Anatomy (2007)
AP Physics (2006)


WORK EXPERIENCE
None

SPECIAL SKILLS
Semi-Fluent in Spanish.
Can type 85 words per minute.
Worked at register for 2 years
Courses in Advanced Computer Training.


HOBBIES AND OTHER INTERESTS
Key Club and Sadd (Students against Drunk Driving).
School sports: Football, Track, and Baseball
Passion to help people
Church volunteer

REFERENCES
Available on request.



My comments:


Dilxxx xxxx
83 Maxxxx Drive
xxxxxx, MI 48323
248-xxx-xxxx xxxxxx@gmail.com



EMPLOYMENT OBJECTIVE
To utilize my skills and contribute to the work environment.
Remove this. A resume will be glanced at, make the most interesting information first. Assume the person looking at it, if it is looked at, will have a stack of 500, and an hour to "read" them all.


EDUCATIONAL BACKGROUND
Wayne State University, Detroit, Mi. (2007-)
Major: Biology (Pre-Med)
XXXXX High School, XXXXXX, MI. (2004-2007)
See first comment. Put your grades, and notable achievements here.


High School Courses taken:
Calculus (2007)
AP American History (2007)
AP Spanish (2007)
Anatomy (2007)
AP Physics (2006)


WORK EXPERIENCE
None

Cut this out. Explain in the cover letter why you don't have work experience. Don't flaunt it here.


SPECIAL SKILLS
Semi-Fluent in Spanish.
Can type 85 words per minute.
Worked at register for 2 years
Courses in Advanced Computer Training.

Now this is good! Put it above the high school courses. This is what will get you a job.


HOBBIES AND OTHER INTERESTS
Key Club and Sadd (Students against Drunk Driving).
School sports: Football, Track, and Baseball
Passion to help people
Church volunteer

Make references a separate sheet. Have the same header as your resume.
REFERENCES
Available on request.


Wow thank you so much! I wasn't expecting someone to give me that much. May God Bless!

LaRoza
October 29th, 2008, 06:27 AM
Wow thank you so much! I wasn't expecting someone to give me that much.

No problem. I have read a lot of books on it. This was the best: http://www.amazon.com/Confessions-Recruiting-Director-Insiders-Landing/dp/0735204047

Almost everything I said is from that book. (I have a good memory).


May God Bless!

Hope so.

metallicasfan118
October 29th, 2008, 06:34 AM
No problem. I have read a lot of books on it. This was the best: http://www.amazon.com/Confessions-Recruiting-Director-Insiders-Landing/dp/0735204047

Almost everything I said is from that book. (I have a good memory).



Hope so.

Haha yeah. What should be the first thing I put on that page instead of what I have?

macogw
October 29th, 2008, 06:41 AM
It's not necessary to have an objective, but it doesn't hurt. They can just skip it.

metallicasfan118
October 29th, 2008, 06:42 AM
It's not necessary to have an objective, but it doesn't hurt. They can just skip it.

Ok educational background seems a good way to start it then.

LaRoza
October 29th, 2008, 06:42 AM
Haha yeah. What should be the first thing I put on that page instead of what I have?

Dilxxx xxxx
83 Maxxxx Drive
xxxxxx, MI 48323
248-xxx-xxxx – xxxxxx@gmail.com


EDUCATIONAL BACKGROUND
• Wayne State University, Detroit, Mi. (2007-)
* GPA: Only if it was good!
* Any awards or honours
• Major: Biology (Pre-Med)
• XXXXX High School, XXXXXX, MI. (2004-2007)

SPECIAL SKILLS
• Semi-Fluent in Spanish.
• Can type 85 words per minute.
• Worked at register for 2 years This could be reworded, try to emphasise customer service and interaction
• Courses in Advanced Computer Training. This may be more specific. Recruiters are usually technical dumb.

High School Courses taken:
• Calculus (2007) Grades would help, if high school was recent
• AP American History (2007)
• AP Spanish (2007)
• Anatomy (2007)
• AP Physics (2006)

HOBBIES AND OTHER INTERESTS
• Key Club and Sadd (Students against Drunk Driving).
• School sports: Football, Track, and Baseball
• Passion to help people
• Church volunteer

LaRoza
October 29th, 2008, 06:43 AM
It's not necessary to have an objective, but it doesn't hurt. They can just skip it.

An objective, especially the one above, hurts. It is obvious out of a manual, and boring. An objective would be good if you have a really specific one besides "get money and experience".

forger
October 29th, 2008, 06:51 AM
Hey future colleague ;)

What job are you looking for? Usually you should prepare a CV for each job application, especially the objective of the CV, for example what is the cause you've written this application?


CV Objectives

* Computer/Customer Support
* Web hosting support
* Programming
* Systems Administrator

..and so on.. :)

You won't have much time after the 3rd year though :) I don't know how things are in US, here in Serbia I get paged/beeped by the attendant every SOOO often and unexpectedly.

Wish you luck and succes!

macogw
October 29th, 2008, 08:55 AM
An objective, especially the one above, hurts. It is obvious out of a manual, and boring. An objective would be good if you have a really specific one besides "get money and experience".

hahah ok, true. i should revise to "a *good* objective doesn't hurt" I need to revise the objective on mine.

Tigershell
October 29th, 2008, 11:16 AM
I'd also use a seperate email address than the one you use to sign up to forums etc.